Doodles from Daily Drabbles

Game Plan

Constructive Critique Model

1. Response: I really appreciated the in-depth thought that was given while Ryan was doing the entire project. I liked how the image turned out where it is aesthetically pleasing as well as captivating.
2. Description: There are a total of three images. In each image, there is a human figure, as the focus, where a gun is aimed at him/her. Like glass, a part of the face is shattered. The background is 2 thirds black. 
3. Analysis & Interpretation: Starting from the background, using the rule of thirds, the two-thirds of black makes the one-third of white stand out more. Strategically, Ryan places the human figure at that area to allow the focal point to stand out. Paralleling the white area where the face is supposedly blown off by the gun with the background, there is a sense of rhythm to the image. The lips that are cut into pieces signifies a kind of silence as well as if words are made up of glass- easily shattered. The black and white tone to the image also brings us back to how "black lives matter".
4. Evaluation & Judgment: The combination of the black lives on the background makes the image interesting and gets the message across. His message: The act of deleting mouths is symbolic for erasure – that through the killing of black lives, accompanies the erasure of stories. By deconstructing mouths, likening it to an object as the bullet passes through it, the advertisement communicates the mindlessness of killing black lives, and hence, invites the viewer to interrogate the full extent of police brutality, and racial inequality. I particularly like the idea of the erasure as it shows so much more than just the "erasure of stories". It also shows the fragility of life and how easy words can destroy people. Perhaps, the image of the gun and the human hand does not fit with the image but overall, the advert gets the message across.

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Ideation and Exploration

Composition

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After painting the mythical creatures and adding in the words, the entire effect of the lost books is not there. The typography has been miscalculated as the words look too much handwritten (my own) and the tone of the seriousness and mystical has been lost. What's more, but just have one side to the pages does not seem like the pages are from a book; after all, books are usually printed on both sides. Furthermore, there is no clear narrative linking all the pages.

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TITLE OF ADVERT SERIES

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Personally, I felt that this looks the simplest out of the three adverts that I have done. This is less of mysterious but more of fantasy. Therefore, while I was doing the drafts for this drawing, I decided to draw the negative spaces of the animals on the tracing paper instead of tracing all the details of the animal. I felt that by doing that it will give rise to a more mysterious feel as if you know but yet you don't know. 

I played around with the placing of the sketches on the image and I realised that it looks slightly better when the animals seem to be coming out of the paper instead of just floating around (perhaps it could be due to the fact that I did not cut the animals to shape). 

However, this advert seemed to be more of a storybook advertisement instead of being a cafe's. Since the cafe have storybook readings for the kids, i feel that this advert still kinda works (albeit slightly forced). Similar to the first advert, the bright and vivid colours of the logo does not fit in with the image totally (although it probably would have if my printer had the inks the print the correct colours). 

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